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The Rising of the Assassin (Short Story)
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I really liked the beginning of this where he torched the tomb, but maybe it could have helped if he had done something a bit more basic then just press a button such as soak things with oil and toss a torch at them. Something that implies more the emergency of the measures being taken. The poem was a ice touch and presented the passing of time well.
Regarding criticism, I suggest working a bit on your dialogue and how it is presented. Try to describe what they do as they answered or tones said in, something to convey the emotions or lack of when responding. It's an invaluable tool and gives the characters more personality when speaking.
Sorry it took so long to review this.
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